Nice Report writing, Felix! I like how you included quotes from different people involved in the incident, and how you have varied the introductions to the quotes e.g. by introducing the person first, then their quote or the quote first, then the person. Well done! You have written a good re-orientation at the end, with a great idea about what the townspeople's next steps are. Your re-orientation is written in the present tense, which is what we focused on in class. Keep up the great work! You could look at editing your orientation at the start of your writing, to make sure it is short and snappy, informing the reader of who, what, where, why and when (could include details like the name of the town, lighthouse keeper if you want - what specific time did the incident happen? why were the villagers partying?). Keep it up!
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Nice Report writing, Felix! I like how you included quotes from different people involved in the incident, and how you have varied the introductions to the quotes e.g. by introducing the person first, then their quote or the quote first, then the person. Well done! You have written a good re-orientation at the end, with a great idea about what the townspeople's next steps are. Your re-orientation is written in the present tense, which is what we focused on in class. Keep up the great work! You could look at editing your orientation at the start of your writing, to make sure it is short and snappy, informing the reader of who, what, where, why and when (could include details like the name of the town, lighthouse keeper if you want - what specific time did the incident happen? why were the villagers partying?). Keep it up!
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